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Apr 29, 2019 17:08:56


by @basilesamel PATRON | 264 words | 433🔥 | 484💌

Basile Samel

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I'm redesigning my personal website and I have to convince people to join me in a short text. It's incredibly hard because it implies I must be crystal clear about where I am heading and what I am all about, and be able to put it into inspiring words. Here is my attempt:

First day of kindergarten, I go through the gates running, without a tear, without a cry: diving into the unknown makes me feel alive. I wanted to grow up to be an inventor. At 13 I write my first computer program. I graduate from software engineering, aged 23. A love for knowledge is deeply ingrained in me.

Knowledge, but also wisdom. When my Vietnamese grandparents fled the Indochina War to seek asylum in France, I became a son of diversity. I grew up in a family of social activists, with modest means, but engaged in a pursuit to help others through their work. In high school, I discover Plato, Seneca, Socrates, Rousseau, and Spinoza, among other great authors and thinkers: I instantly fall in love with the quest for wisdom.

It is no surprise I am now a tech entrepreneur: I believe in working with others, for others, while using my own vision of the world. I am the master of my day, and I want my work to have a strong, positive impact.

Life is short, I might as well spend it seeking mastery, not only for my own intellectual satisfaction but for the common good. Welcome, and let's join forces together!

What do you think pals? Is it too much maybe?

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    @basilesamel well done! I was a bit wondering about the "join me" part, as everybody else it seems, but the text itself is interesting, concise and impactful.

    PhilH avatar PhilH | Apr 29, 2019 22:25:05
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      @philh Thank you Philippe!

      Basile Samel avatar Basile Samel | Apr 30, 2019 10:08:51
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    @basilesamel - I think people join something -- because they want it to make them better -- what's the promise I will start to imagine I'll get by joining you? Will I become a tech entrepreneur too?

    Brian Ball avatar Brian Ball | Apr 29, 2019 09:18:00
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      @brianball Interesting! since it's a personal website, I think it makes sense to start introducing myself before introducing my products, but I definitely need to write the rest of the copy from the reader's point of view.

      Basile Samel avatar Basile Samel | Apr 29, 2019 18:27:55
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    I like it! It's interesting to know abt your background :D

    I was confused about joining you too :D

    I read it "convince people to (join me in a short text)"

    Not like "(convince people to join me) in a short text" lol

    Ali Salah avatar Ali Salah | Apr 29, 2019 17:35:17
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      @alollou haha ok :P I will be careful about my phrasing then, thank you!

      Basile Samel avatar Basile Samel | Apr 29, 2019 18:29:20
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    @basilesamel i like it! in a few short paras you gave a good bio of your personal and family history, what drives you and how it shapes your work moving forward. Sweet. 👍

    Jason Leow avatar Jason Leow | Apr 29, 2019 23:34:19
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      @jasonleow Thank you Jason! :)

      Basile Samel avatar Basile Samel | Apr 29, 2019 18:29:32
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    @basilesamel great history of your background. After reading it, seems there is something lacking if I'm your customer, why I need to join you, how you can help me, are you the right person to help me?

    * It seems it was focusing too much on you. Maybe you can connect your background to something that you will offer by cutting in half about your background and connect it to the value that you will offer.

    Chris 🤔🇵🇭 avatar Chris 🤔🇵🇭 | Apr 29, 2019 23:30:03
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      @chrisdeuda thanks, you are right. It's the topic of the next section of the website. I start presenting myself before introducing my work/products and how I want to help my user concretely.

      Basile Samel avatar Basile Samel | Apr 29, 2019 18:31:08
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    @basilesamel It is interesting to hear about your background and why this endeavor is important to you. After reading it, I am feeling a little bit lacking in terms of what exactly would I be joining? I would humbly recommend adding more specifics about where you are going and what people can expect when joining.

    Brandon Wilson avatar Brandon Wilson | Apr 29, 2019 08:14:48
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      @brandonwilson True! It's the first section of my new website. What follows is a map of my on-going projects/goals so it's gonna flow nicely, I hope :)

      Basile Samel avatar Basile Samel | Apr 29, 2019 17:19:13
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    @basilesamel - This is beautiful Basile. I didn't know all this about you before and this is a nice to the point and descriptive writing.
    One question about the call to action- what are you asking people who read it to do? Is it to join 200wordsaday? Or is it something else that you are having them do on your personal website?

    Keni avatar Keni | Apr 29, 2019 11:13:21
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      @keni thank you so much! there is a section of the website following this text where I'm displaying all my on-going projects with dedicated CtA :D (200WaD => join our writing community, Alter-Nomad ebook => enjoy the world, become a sustainable nomad, Patreon => support my work and access exclusive content and discounts on my products etc.)

      Basile Samel avatar Basile Samel | Apr 29, 2019 17:22:04
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      @basilesamel - Well now I need a personal invitation to this site.
      I repeat - You are an efficient beast with all these activities Monsieur Basile.

      Keni avatar Keni | Apr 29, 2019 11:37:45
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      @keni Thank you! It's going to be public in a couple of days, no worries :P

      Basile Samel avatar Basile Samel | Apr 29, 2019 18:31:43
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