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Jul 04, 2019 16:44:10

Untitled..(for now)

by @gabrielgreco PATRON | 500 words | 21🔥 | 160💌

Gabriel Greco

Current day streak: 21🔥
Total posts: 160💌
Total words: 93633 (374 pages 📄)

He was a small man made even smaller by time. He'd been eight decades here and his thin shoulders were stooped and his hair, though still full, was no longer streaked with gray. It was combed back and wavy, like a frothing river sweeping over boulders, suggesting a hint of remaining vitality. He'd always had an earnest look about him, wide-eyed, almost innocent, but anxiety was etched onto his face as he stepped out of the quiet apartment and locked the door behind him. 

Although Mr. Bojan was not frowning while he walked down the dim lit inner staircase, the neighbor's twelve year old daughter could only mumble a hello and avert her gaze as she passed him on her way up for lunch. He'd scarcely noticed. Only as he reached the building's front door did he catch an inkling of her presence, when he saw the green bicycle leaning against the somber cement wall.

He pushed the door and stepped out into glaring daylight. The sun was already high up and casting narrow, vertical shadows, which was just as well; he couldn't feel its heat on his skin as he walked beneath it towards the town center. He'd been numb these past several days, and the weather had ceased to affect him, along with many other things he had thought important. He would ask for gardenias at the flower shop. Something stirred in him, in his now-sunken chest and low in the belly, as he remembered that fragrant hedge one night, many years ago, in another part of the world. 

She'd been so taken in by their scent tears had sprung at the corners of her eyes.
"They're so beautiful. They smell wonderful!" He could still see how she had cupped a white blossom between her palms, like somebody scooping water from a stream, or a fountain, and how she had angled her face downward, as if to drink, her eyes shut, inhaling deeply as the tip of her nose brushed against the petals. Bliss, that was bliss, he thought. Then the memory faded and the thought trailed.  

"We don't have gardenias." The girl at the flower shop said to him, "I'm sorry."
"Are you sure? Do you know where I might find some?" He asked, almost agitated. He'd been looking forward to their scent, hoping they would spur his memory. While he didn't know it, he was not unlike an addict desperate for his dose, craving that rush; a rush, or rather a flood, of memories that were now hidden away, or lying in rest, until the smell receptors carrying the right scent to the hippocampus, triggered pertinent synapses in his mind's-eye. 

The girl looked bored, but she was not unsympathetic. Busy tying greenery to a bouquet, she motioned with her head towards a bamboo shelving unit next to the counter. 
"I think we might have scent of gardenia candles," she said, "you can check on the middle and lower shelves if you want. That's where they'd be."

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    @gabrielgreco welcome to #TeamStreak!

    Piglet avatar Piglet | Jul 05, 2019 10:10:11
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    @gabrielgreco welcome to #TeamStreak, enjoy your stay pls !

    Knight avatar Knight | Jul 05, 2019 06:30:15
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      @knight Thanks, I will, as long as it lasts.

      Gabriel Greco avatar Gabriel Greco | Jul 05, 2019 09:11:47
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    @gabrielgreco haha you're back when I'm out 🙄😄
    Anyhow, the important thing: this is a fascinating beginning of a story! I look forward to the next episode..

    PhilH avatar PhilH | Jul 04, 2019 23:04:35
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      @philh Thanks Phil, we intersected paths here, haha.
      I'm not looking forward to writing it so much. It's a tough one.

      Gabriel Greco avatar Gabriel Greco | Jul 05, 2019 09:09:58
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    @gabrielgreco Ladies and Gentlemen of #Teamstreak....we have a NEW TEAM MEMBER!!!! By my tally Gabriel was a member of #Teamstreak before it formally existed. Based on some of your writings, it's hard for me to ascertain your opinion of joining the team, but I am thrilled that you have joined us for as long as you would like to stay. We are #Teamstreak!!!

    Brandon Wilson avatar Brandon Wilson | Jul 04, 2019 10:02:21
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      @brandonwilson Wow, it's quite the select group. The Under 30 Over 30, and I made the list :)
      Thanks for the warm welcome, think I may be around a little while.

      Gabriel Greco avatar Gabriel Greco | Jul 05, 2019 08:54:47
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      @gabrielgreco I am happy to see that you overcome the itch to break the streak at 29! So... how about that dare (You hit 50 the first time :-)
      @brandonwilson , so that you know, I dared him to keep the streak till 100 :-)))

      Lucjah avatar Lucjah | Jul 07, 2019 14:47:00
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      @brandonwilson @lucjah #LifetimeStreak

      Gabriel Greco avatar Gabriel Greco | Jul 09, 2019 23:39:22
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      @gabrielgreco YEEY
      maybe for guys over 100 @ brandonwilson ?

      Lucjah avatar Lucjah | Jul 10, 2019 09:33:20
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    @gabrielgreco - Wow. You write fiction with so many layers. I have zero skills there.

    And welcome to #TeamStreak!!

    Keni avatar Keni | Jul 04, 2019 10:51:53
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      @gabrielgreco @keni

      Keni, your editing skills alone is everything.

      Welcome back to team streak Gabriel

      Seun Oyebode avatar Seun Oyebode | Jul 04, 2019 20:47:49
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      @seunoyebode - Thanks Seun. I try

      Keni avatar Keni | Jul 04, 2019 17:57:38
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      @keni Thanks, Keni.
      You think? I'm not very sure. Sometimes I think I try and it's terrible and other times I don't put in too much effort and it's also terrible. I figure I just gotta keep trying regardless.

      Gabriel Greco avatar Gabriel Greco | Jul 05, 2019 08:48:49
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      @gabrielgreco hahaha... such a coquette you are <3

      Lucjah avatar Lucjah | Jul 07, 2019 14:44:11
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      @lucjah lol if I were a lady, most assuredly I would be.

      Gabriel Greco avatar Gabriel Greco | Jul 09, 2019 23:38:52
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      @gabrielgreco ;-}

      Lucjah avatar Lucjah | Jul 10, 2019 09:32:00
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